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Mon, 04/21/2014 - 15:56 -- poet14

What u see is not a mistake .
It's not a spelling error or a grammar mess up .
It's right . In my eyes . In the poets fingers that's how it's supposed to be . Stop criticizing me !
No there's not supposed to be a period there . Or there . No - no comma , semi-colin , bunny ears No
It's just supposed to be read fluently . This part is supposed to be read like that . With your voice sounding like the gun shot that killed that man . Your heart is supposed to feel like your standing on the edge of a chair with a noose around UR neck .
No don't erase that part , thats the character contemplating life , too bad u never felt like that . Too bad you can't imagine that . So sad you never lost someone . Or you have  and don't wanna revisit those feelings . No do not take out that line , that line describes her hatred - the separation of the lines defines a shift . Yes there's a title no I'm not changing it to make more sense . No I will not dispose of that trashy language it's supposed make you feel like shit . No i will not shorten it , sorry if u dont read on . Yes that word is supposed to be capitalized , its Jesus's name for Chris sakes . Yes that's a noun , yes it's in a fragmented order , that's the millisecond that I'm attempting to capture before the plane flies into the tower . Absolutely not will I include a name
, I don't wanna point fingers . Yes this is a universal poem , everyone knows how it feel , that's the point . No you are not allowed to change the theme , there's no support for that . No I won't fabricate and pace the beginning there's no point in trying to slow down death, yes that's a image of a skull no I won't just come out and say that . Yes that's a allusion to Mandela , no I will not just come out and say that either.  No ,I won't erase it -  it needs to be loved  , it needs to be hated , it  needs to heard , it needs to be typed  , to be written . It needs to be read .

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