Incredible

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Where am I? I don't know I'm in a zone where it shows that there's no worries,                                       My thoughts they seem so blurry.  I'm thinking, but yet I'm lost. This maze of thoughts seems to have no exit, I hear a beat and it's so pleasant. I love it, its soothing that's one thing about music. Even if I'm standing still I feel as if I'm cruising. Trying to find that guidance, music keeps me smiling. Music equals life so my breath itself inspires me. Thankful for another day,I'm left enchanted. Success I demand it but it's not just go be handed. My heart itself is branded I want more than just a preview, I hear a metronome and it's my heart saying continue. I lost myself and music has opened a brand new path, the best road taken is the one you make so a new dimension is where I'm at. Incredible the way how music takes control of you, music is my curtain and I reveal with every beat and tune.                                                          

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OmmarCastillo

The spacing came out to be a bit off, but I would really like any feedback on this writing. Thanks

jcreek

I love it, mostly because it applys to me, as well. 

Maybe change "that's one thing" to "thats the thing" just for a better flow..?

otherwise, its Incredible!

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