GRACE
Location
Your boldness, Your Heart
Your soul, Your art
All of you, which gives all of me.
Your intelligence, Your brain
The way you care makes me go insane.
The way you love me , makes me feel pleased.
The way you dress, you look like success
Let's think more about your personality, Your avalability
Your joy, your life
The most amazing woman you are,
The woman I look up to,
The woman I can't be without,
The woman I can't live without.
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jesscalm09
If you guys could give me feedback , on anything I need to improve would be great!!
ChMaEve
I really enjoy the way you composed the poem, with talking about the physical aspects (except when you mentioned her soul) at first, and then heading on towards her personality... what you REALLY love about her. However, if you want some constructive criticism, I would just say try reading your poetry allowed a few times to get a nice, clean flow. ^_^ It got a bit choppy when you wrote "makes me go insane." I would just suggest thinking about that. You know, focus on syllables and whatnot, but still have fun with it! You did a really great job, and I could just feel the emotion POUR out of the screen at me.
jesscalm09
Thank you.... I thought it needed some more work ..
I really thank you
