Wind Will Flow

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 23:34 -- jerlee

The slush wave through the soil
Bouncing within the earth
Of the hollow soul,
As the wave pushes back and forth,
It sing a breeze of loneliness,
So mighty, so...
So strong!
It grave the hollow soul 
As it hold the soul one piece again...
so forth the wind that will flow...
onward to the next victim...
As it sing away...

Comments

jwiener

Awesome imagery! It's hard to pick a favorite line, but I really like "It sing a breeze of loneliness" because this line manages to play on multiple senses with both imagery and sounds. Have you thought about making a sequel or companion poem? This poem focuses on nature, and it would be cool to get the perspective of the soul the wind takes, too. Just a thought! Meanwhile, have you ever written an ode poem? Check out how and more in the Resources section!

jerlee

Sequel? Hmmmm... I don't think i'll be making one, since every poem i write is base on my emotion and my thought of the day, but if one day i feel like making one, i'll surely do it. An ode poem sound fun to write, but i love free writing my poems, i think it bring the best out of me. Thank you for giving me ideas on my future poems

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