Positive of negatives

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As the spring coils down

It eventually has to spring back up

From sunrise to sundown 

We always hope for another sun up.

 

Life isnt revolved around us

But for some reason we're stuck on the bus

With the leather seats and cheap old fasteners

We'll all continue this journey as passengers. 

 

 

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jwiener

This short poem has a great rhyme scheme and really makes the reader think about all the opposites that are present everyday, and how they occur for our entire lives. My favorite lines are definitely "With the leather seats and cheap old fasteners / We'll all continue this journey as passengers" because after writing about the opposites in life, you tie everything together with a strong metaphor. Have you ever written a haiku? Check out how to and more in the Resources section!

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