Old Time Blues

Mon, 05/19/2014 - 19:12 -- Denise1

Location

Aurora, IL
United States

Remembering the good times that once existed

Ooh where have they gone? So far long ago—

I can tell you it has been since we’ve been “ONE”.

AHH! AHH! BOOM BOOM… BOOM BOOM!                                      [Onomatopoeia]

My heart cries out for the love we once had,                                 [Personification]

I’ve never pictured this being the reason of me being so sad.    [Masculine]

I have no problem really seeing both sides of the issue—                      [Internal]

But here I am stuck in the middle of this awful war

Between the two that brought me life.

Brought me into a wonderful life gone bad.

 

 The worst things in life appear to us when one thing has gone horribly wrong.

I wasn’t meant to be sent this problem I’m facing.                                   [Assonance]

I’m so emotionally drained I glide through my day

Through the pale gloomy hallways, nothing but faces                 [Visual Imagery]

pass me by. Loud voices speaking at each other                           [Auditory Imagery]

and loud feet shuffling to make it through the crowds.

Nothing seems to faze me these days often                                               [Feminine]

Hopefully one day soon my heart will soften.

Life without you is like a baby bird with no mother.                                [Simile]

Everything you say is an excuse,                                                     [Paradox]

Why can’t everything just go back to normal—

Like in the good ol’ days,

When everyone could sit and converse in the same room.

Now one word can’t be said without voices escalading.

Quietly crying for some attention,                                                   [Meter]

You don’t seem to notice what I’m wanting.

All I really need now is your support,

But you have a weird way of giving it.

I’m starting to slowly give up…

 

Our relationship is a horseback ride                                  [NamedNamed Metaphor]

It seems to be more complicated than it actually is.

It’s so hard for me to say what I mean,

Exceptionally hard for me to say how I feel

It’s tough talking to someone who doesn’t listen.

You feel like your being shut down and what you’re implying

Doesn’t make a difference what so ever.

My heart has been tossed and turned, beaten up and scared    [Feelingimagery]

Ripped into shreds and gently put back together

This is not a great feeling to have.

 

 

 

Trying to sit and mend this pain                                                     [Consonance]

As my tears fall to the ground like rain.

 Crying is the best part of my life.                                                   [Irony]

The struggle between us cringes inside my chest

Aching and throbbing, feeling like it’s being stabbed with knives. [NamedImplied Metaphor]

“You pushed me far, you brought me to this” – Keisha Cole                   [Allusion]

I want to make up and push this aside,

Deep down I think I will I feel it inside.

When we come to an understanding of each other

And all the held back feelings become uncovered,

 

We wrap arms around one another as the wrinkles                    [TactileImagery]

From your shirt glide over my hands.

The tears of happiness fall to my cheek and gently slide down

Just like a water ride.

Hopefully this can last because I don’t like being without a father.

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