Hi!

First, I apologize for taking so long to comment on your work, and I thank you for sharing it with me!

I am so glad you're working with intertextuality; the video and your voice (what a reading voice you have!) and the pictures you used really brought the poem to life. I think this kind of work isn't done enough in poetry, so I'm happy to see a young poet working with multiple forms for one piece. Check out Anne Carson's book Nox if you want to see some cool stuff I think you'd like. Also http://writing.upenn.edu/pennsound/ has some great resources you should check out.

As for your actual poem here, props on the opening. I could really see the scene unfold as you presented images of the stranger approaching the speaker, and the speaker's thought process seemed very alive for me as well. (Reminded me of Allan Ginsberg or Walt Whitman--I think you'd be into their narrative, free form poetry with its long lines.)

Because the beginning was so strong, I wanted to see MORE post-the "Absolutely!" line. You did such a good job of expressing the sentiment in the second half of the poem, but I wanted to be able to see it a bit better--a showing, not a telling, if you get what I mean. For an example of how image can back up self-pondering, check out the poem "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" by T.S. Eliot, especially the last four stanzas.

A fabulous read! Looking forward to your revision and new work :).

Best,
jmedwards8