it's not that serious homeboy

Location

10458
United States
40° 51' 43.8444" N, 73° 53' 9.636" W

a homeboy's bad attitude
arrogance
flagrant
disrespect
disconnected
disenfranchise
disorderly conduct
so out of order
saying to him
what's your problem
and his response
sounded uneducated
emancipated
with the notion
he can do whatever he want with reckless motion
i had to remind him
what his role is
and shut his mouth like the great one the rock
wasting precious time between now and graduation, you are on the clock
if you graduate
when i ask homeboy to be mindful
actions seem lost like the two chicks in clueless
his idiotic ways will leave him lifeless
no one
won't deal with you
so either wise up
or be 21 knocking on a door
that will open up opportunities to be on welfare
statistic that will shatter records quicker than one's score on the game modern warfare

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Comments

KatieMarple.

A couple things in this poem stood out a little bit, as a little... off. Like the reference to Clueless and Modern Warfare. But, if I look around that much, the poem has some killer beat to it. Almost like a rap. I really like this piece a lot.

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

the reference to clueless and modern warfare was a connection to this individial's action and behavior

the purpose was to bring this poem to life in terms of real life situation

this is a true story about a hs student in whom he thought the world owes it to him and i had to put him in his place

im humble that you express my poem has a killer beat to it along with you liking it

check out my other poems and give me hoenst feedback

 

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