Fight

Wed, 03/07/2018 - 13:04 -- V.Soto

I hear a kid screaming in the back of the bus 

The other kid telling him to shut up and grow up

 

When they got off the bus to fight 

The other feels like there is a shining light 

 

He felt like he is about to throw up 

The other kid swings, hits him, now there isa Big bump 

 

While standing strong taking the big hits 

 Knowing its only going to hurt for a little bit 

 

There comes on old lady saying if we don't stop 

She is going to call the cops

 

The kid that was hitting starts running from the opp

Then makes it home with out getting caught 

This poem is about: 
My community

Comments

V.Soto

This is dope and pretty scary-javiervelasco

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I really liked that you rymed. - Erika

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i liked how u rhymed/nick.m

 

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i like how you used a real world problem. ~Natalie O.

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EmanuelRosas-I liked how you put that the kid didnt get caught because he wasnt

the one who started it

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Josev- i like how this showed postived things

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Marco Jimenez-i like your rhyming 

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jose cisneros good job and great work

V.Soto

I loved the way you wrote your peom. It was pretty good.-Geraldine

V.Soto

Good jod on your poem.-Blanca

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