Very nice play on MLK's "I Have a Dream" speech. I think this poem would be so much more powerful if you turned it into a story. For some odd reason, stories have a profound effect on our unconscious'. An example of how you might turn this poem into a story is by creating a character and having this character travel through this new world of acceptance and love. The trick will be to keep it short and sweet so you'll have to employ symbolism, imagery, metaphors, and similes. Luckily for you, Power Poetry has amazing Poetry Tips under the "Resource" tab. Here's the link to the one I think will be the most beneficial. http://www.powerpoetry.org/resources/poem-about-surroundings Use all of these tips to writing a poem about your surroundings and apply them to creating the world you've dreamed up in your imagination!