Breath

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From my first faltering breath, whispered
Pronounced words bound in abandon
Space in deafening silence
Screams muffled in mourning
Bulging eyes proclaim
Clarity, reined
Unrestraint
Seeking
Air.

Comments

WordSmith_15

Wow. Your structure is superb. Only my second poem and I can tell that your strong suit is framing your poems in such a profound way. Kudos to you for that. 

This poem is really simplistic and it allows the audience to get what they needed from the poem and as a poet who hates to intepret my work for other people, I respect the brevity of this poem. Packed with emotion. really good =)

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