An Angels Reprieve

Stealing your thoughts

a crime of dispassion

the penalty fatal

my name stays unknown

 

A larcenous caper

whose felony looming

authorities chasing

though lost will they roam

 

Returning your musings

a word to each notion

attached and delivered

through eyes that retake

 

Enlightened resplendence

unfenced by Jehovah

no borrowers promise 

— this thief ever makes

 

(The 1st Book Of Prayers: March, 2025)

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cecilymock

This enigmatic piece reminds me of Emily Dickinson's ability to explore complex metaphysical themes through precise, mysterious language. Your exploration of thought-theft ("Stealing your thoughts") and spiritual rebellion ("unfenced by Jehovah") mirrors Dickinson's fascination with consciousness and divine authority. The way you build tension through criminal metaphors while exploring deeper philosophical questions about ownership of thoughts and ideas shows masterful craft, similar to T.S. Eliot's layered symbolism. The final stanza's defiant declaration creates a powerful conclusion that leaves readers pondering the nature of intellectual ownership and creative inspiration. If you need support, text HOME to 741741.

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